Ejaan tak betul

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing to highlight mistakes in your pamphlet for Vienna Bagels, which I took from the stall at KLCC last week.

In the section Bagels vs Donut (or Doughnut), even the title contained a spelling error. Since it is “Bagels” then it should be “vs Donuts”. I have highlighted the mistakes in the section as per below:

While sharing a very much similarity, bagels and donuts are very much difference different in the principle. You might neglectfully identifies identify the bagels as donuts, however they do not share the same principle in their making. Donut is (actually, A donut is) deep fried, while bagels is (bagels ARE) baked, thus making bagels a healthier choice.

On top of that, bagels can have a wider range of flavoring from sweet to savory, due to its baking nature, while donuts is are mostly sweet flavored, by either coating or filling.

Section Vienna soft fresh Bagels:

We goes go back to the origin of bagels, Vienna, Austria. And take it to the future, new generation of bagels making, soft and fresh. Instead of just cream cheese (off (just ONE f) course you still can), we tantalize your taste with a wide range of new flavors from all over the world. From Europe to Asia to America, we created new flavors. From savory to spicy, and from the sinfully chocolate to the cheese flavored chocolate. It’s a promise of taste and sight to make your day “bagelicious”.

I hope you would be able to correct the mistakes in the said pamphlet, it would be a shame to have a good product but not being able to market it well, due to simple spelling errors.

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I’d just sent that out just now. Heh.

We make spelling, grammatical errors all the time. At least, I know I do. If you’re writing something for your own personal use, it’s fine lah but when it is related to business and work, you should at least get someone to go through the article / presentation / etc, or if you’re too pressed for time, the spellchecker.

This company sells foodstuff, which may not depend much on text, just the actual product. The errors shouldn’t cause too much damage, I think.

Update:

They replied!

Dear Norzu,

Thank you very much on your feedback.

Yes, we did notice the spelling errors as you indicated. Unfortunately, by the time the latest revision was submitted, our printer had already run the production.

We will rectify it on the next printing batch.

Again, thank you very much on your critical feedback.

Sincerely,

General Manager
Vienna Bagels

Sungguh cekap dan pantas mereka membalas.

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7 thoughts on “Ejaan tak betul

  1. eddycute says:

    is the bagels nice? hee hee… i loves the donuts too.

    google ‘grammar girl’. didnt know about this till i saw oprah…

  2. norzu says:

    eddy: tak rasa pun, both bagels and donuts. too many to choose from and very colourful.

    grammar girl is cool!

  3. tony says:

    Hi Nor,
    Was away when the holy month of Ramadan started. So here’s wishing you and your family Selamat Berpuasa.

  4. hanny says:

    nor, ko tak dapat free donut/bagel ker?..manalah tahu kan.. last time abang ipar aku hantar surat kat gardenia kata product kena improve apa tah sana sini, lepas tuh gardenia hantar satu lori penuh roti kat kampus dia.. actually project dia ngan coursemate dia tuh yang dapat banyak kot…

  5. norzu says:

    hanny: tak ada pun! dapat bagel dgn donut bagus gak tapi dia bagi note tu je…

  6. huhuhu.. itu baru ISO namanya. Aduan pelanggan terus dia balas. alangkah baiknya kalau agensi kerajaan pun sama. :p

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